Nor does the existence of social networks like Facebook, which are also for the most part real communication between real people, involve any attempt simply to substitute a virtual reality for the actual one. On the contrary, they are parasitic on the real relationships they foster, and which they alter in large part by encouraging people to put themselves on display, and in turn to become voyeurs of the displays of others. Some might claim that the existence of these networking sites provides a social and psychological benefit, helping those who shy away from presenting themselves directly to the world to gain a public place and identity. These sites also enable people to keep in touch with a wide circle of friends and colleagues, thereby increasing the range of their affections, and filling the world with goodwill and happy feelings.
Social networking sites, for instance Facebook, are thought by some to have had a detrimental effect on individual people as well as society and local communities. However, in my opinion, while I believe that such sites are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging effect on local communities.
hey Liz , first of all i just want to say that i cherish you, this is such a great site, and i am learning so much from you, thank you very much, however i just need to ask you something about this task which i have rewritten it in my own words (kind of a practice ) : is it okay to talk about the detrimental effects of social networking sites but then adding another opinion which is : “that some people find it beneficial for example because it lets them explore other cultures and being exposed to new global ideas….”
Firstly, I want to thank you for putting up this website. I will be taking my exam this May and I find your website very useful and easy to understand. I do have a question on the introduction of the model essay, I’m confused as when to use however in a sentence. I know it is a linking word used to contrast but from the paragraph above, is it applicable to use however? In my understanding, however is used to disagree with the first statement which is “Social networking sites, for instance Facebook, are thought by some to have had…” In this case disagreeing with it means that your opinion is that you don’t agree with the first sentence but at the end of the paragraph, you stated that you are agreeing with the statement. Shouldn’t we omit the word however instead?
For opinion essays like the one posted about social networking sites, can I disagree with the fact that social networking sites have negative impact on individuals and society and discuss that throughout my body paragraphs?
Opinion Essays are about presenting a clear position and explaining it. You can see my clear opinion: “in my opinion, while I believe that such sites are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging effect on local communities.”. I divide the individual and society – one is positive and the other is negative. It is a clear opinion.